Monday, September 4, 2017

Life Comments

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The subject of today is the past of yesterday.
You quarrel about your pain but you forget that equal
means the same
We are of same blood, same place
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Yash Nundlal
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Jefferson Carter 04 September 2017

Yash, too many abstractions here (past, drive, significant, etc.) to raise this poem above the level of uninteresting life lessons…Maybe start reading some good contemporary poets in English (Mary Oliver, Billy Collins) if you want to improve? If you have time, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Let me know how you like it. Yrs, JC

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