Saturday, August 6, 2005

Milady Comments

Rating: 4.5

Milady said she spoke too softly
diamonds dancing on her tongue
Milady moved her fingers lightly -
from her fingers rubies hung
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Max Reif 06 August 2005

This is beautiful, an example of effortless rhyme. My only question...in the first line, my mind had to stop for a second to ask, 'Would milady say that she, herself, was speaking too softly, or was she talking about someone else there? ' I can imagine her saying that about herself. I don't know if that second's distraction, for me, is a flaw in the poem, like a tiny flaw in a diamond, or not. Other than that, it really is a perfect gem, in my estimation.

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