Very good for the metaphor of a drive/ride! Now, I am of the old school, believig rhyming is nearly an essential. But either way, the content is excellent owing to the metaphor you used, but it would come off looking much more like a poem if you broke it up into stanzas...That's my opinion. I very much like the metaphor you used; it is fascinating, well-depicted and delightful.
Dope metaphor