My Lord My Feelings Poem by Deepesh Surana
My Lord My Feelings
Don't Stop me my lord, Don't stop me
I have eyes to the world, I have wings to fly...
I have the heart that beats, I have feeling i care..
I owe you everything i have, i have the liability to pay
I am glad when the family comes to me, share there feelings, experience and there problem,
But i am alone in the silence for the rest.
Let me feel the heat, let me touch the pain.
Let me enjoy the rain and let me enjoy the cold.
I will come back to you, i will be in touch with you.
I know you Love me so much, i know you care for me.
This is the time i should move, or i may lose something.
Don't Stop me my lord, Don't stop me
I am afraid of the world, i too have fear.
but the world is not so MEAN, nor the world is cruel.
I will find buddy, I will survive and I will win.
I feel free, I feel happy, I care for you
I LOVE YOU
- Deepesh K. Surana
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4/18/2024 11:44:07 PM # 1.0.0.1119
Thanks for sharing your thoughts, view and concept. I enjoyed the read and found this full of emotion and a deep heartfelt passion of love for the Lord. I hope you do not mind, but I found a couple of minor errors that needed tweaking in order to enhance your work even more. Consistency is good in poetry, and having said that, you have used both 'I' and 'i'. It would help to use one or the other, preferrably 'I'. In your third verse, beginning, 'I am glad when the family comes to me...' In this verse you have used 'there', meaning 'over there' or 'there is a few...'. When referring to people it is 'their' In the last verse, the second to last line you have 'I will find buddy...' Is buddy the name of someone or are you referring to finding a friend. If it is the latter, then it would read better if you put 'I will find a buddy...' Thanks for the read, and many blessings to you