Narissa Part 1 Poem by Casey Lou

Narissa Part 1

Rating: 4.5


My ocean
Swell, swirl
Push, pull
Drag, drown
Cry, chaos
Sink or swim
In my ocean

COMMENTS OF THE POEM

Warm welcome to the world of poets. Your very first verse bagged a score of 9 out of 10. A nice work. Life is also an ocean. It depends on us as to how we manage to be peaceful and happy in the ocean.

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William Jackson 03 July 2007

There is something refreshing about the ocean even when it is threateningly rough and tumble. Fine poem, a lesson for Narissa.

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Yao Tzu 03 July 2007

nice, reminds me of surfing pipeline waves for the first time here in Hawaii.

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Casey Lou

Casey Lou

Redding, Ca
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