New Me, Old Me Comments

Savita, what i meant in last comment re line 13.......... - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - line 13: Thanks to the old me the new me followed by: line 14: can freely live at last. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - ............................IS THAT, in the poem, the old me seemed to be consistently a loser, one who could not be relied on to make ANYTHING 'better' of herself because she [i'm assuming a bit here]: 1 - was not happy, though this COULD have caused good changes 2 - was blinded by a tendency to be mad 3 - lived in the past, probably not giving much thought to the future, and was therefore not likely to improve her life 4 - could not find herself; she was lost! 5 - was not confident. this would be an impediment to becoming 'free to live' I think the Old Me may well have BECOME the New Me, but only due to some great help from others, including changing her attitudes about herself and her relationships to others. how is THAT for elaborating! ? bri :) if you still want to leave lines 13 and 14 as they are, of course you may. it IS your poem after all. i will even put it into a showcase if you say to put it in. i am starting to put poems into May now. bri :)

So far I am liking it. Line 10: one little typo. :) Line 13: I suspect you meant to type: ...the new me the old me Bri :) If 13 were changed, I would send this to MyPoemList.

The new me has only very positive notes. yhat is wonderful. keep up. enjoy life, achieve a lot. God bless you, tony