Charl JF Cilliers

Gold Star - 5,763 Points (25 January 1941 / Cape Town, South Africa)

Proactive Love Song - Poem by Charl JF Cilliers

I said to myself:
the crucial moments must be where
the line breaks come;
you’ll start moving to my rhythms too,
I hope (the ins
and outs are complex and obscure):
one only touches passion
every now and then. I wondered:
are these coupling rhythms now
a rhyming couplet? Would sense remain
if they were given the form of a quatrain
or would the effort be
in vain; an empty train; met with disdain
(passion being so difficult a thing
to entertain) ? Always the threat
that rhythms will disintegrate
(the ins and outs being complex and obscure) .
I thought: I never can be sure
whether you’ll be moving
with me too: but loving looks forward,
as dancing is also prone to do.
Is this poem being written, I wondered, while
you were moving me or I
was moving you?

Topic(s) of this poem: love and art

Form: Verse


Comments about Proactive Love Song by Charl JF Cilliers

  • Liza Sudina (11/11/2015 7:38:00 AM)


    It's genius! ! !
    you’ll start moving to my rhythms too,
    I wondered, while
    you were moving me or I
    was moving you?
    (Report) Reply

    Charl Cilliers Charl Cilliers (11/11/2015 8:11:00 AM)

    You're very kind, Liza!
    Best wishes
    Charl

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, November 11, 2015



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