Watch yourself new soldier
your rifle o'er your back,
never slacken vigliance,
we're very near attack.
The shadow of your mother
walks with you step and heart,
if a bullet hits you suddenly
your mother falls apart.
She cannot lift the weight of death,
she cannot speak to tell
of bullets speeding through the air
..... the implements of Hell.
Sally Plumb
Awe stricken I’m… ‘if a bullet hits you suddenly/your mother falls apart’...Yeah Moms are tike that…so much fixed to kids…nicely worded…thanks for sharing Ms. Nivedita UK 10/10
If this is an attempt to do a Wilfred Owen, it fails. Why not 'over' instead of 'o'er'? It is a stupid device to bring in such stupid and pointless language into something that is supposed to be a modern poem. As a result it ruins the whole poem which, though overall, is weak. The last stanza shows imagination and potential for developing a whole new poem. But not like this! .
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
A lovely heartwarming poem, nice read. Wendy.x