Runaway Poem by Matthew Petrey

Runaway

Rating: 4.5


You dressed me in silk,
Crowned me with gold.
But I fled to the desert,
Where the nights grow cold.

You gave me a palace,
Filled with thousands of halls.
But I chose a home,
Made out of straw.

The foundation too weak,
And storms too strong.
Winds of my emotion,
Scattered it all.

Now lost in this place,
Without food, without water.
I long for my home,
I long for my Father.

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
This is my first poem, I appreciate any constructive criticisms to build me into a better poet. The story about this is just how my relationship with God has been lately, how He has offered me the best things for my life but how I have gone on a path where I did what I thought was best instead. Anyways, hope you enjoy.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
David Wood 11 April 2013

This us a very strong first poem. I would have ended the third stanza withscattered all all along only to rhyme with the strong that ends the second line. Otherwise a very good poem.

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