Tuesday, August 19, 2008

Speed Can Destroy. Comments

Rating: 5.0

Numbed by trickles of sheer icy fear
She knelt, as the dark flow of red
Treacled it's circle, dis-colouring green.
Oozing it's way round his head.
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Fay Slimm
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David Threadgold 30 August 2008

Hi Fay. A superb picture and story in rhyme just the way I like to enjoy my poetry. with a serious message to boot, Excellent another (10) I think. Regards Dave.

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Tom Balch 20 August 2008

WOW what a great and moving piece 10+

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Ian Bowen 19 August 2008

Fay, your account, just after an accident, is both moving and horrific. Just left me hoping that this is indeed a fictional piece and not a true experience. Well written, and as usual, you choose your words with great skill.10/10 Ian

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Fay Slimm

Fay Slimm

in Cornwall U.K.
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