Randy Littik


Strayed - Poem by Randy Littik

Where am I going?

Feels this heartbeat dying somehow..
Maybe it's a dream, a beautiful one?
About lost memories and scars crafted by the past.
The memories that make me lost,
The scars that once broke my inside..

And till the dawn I still lost my way.

But that's fine by me,
Even the wound could not darken inside me
I still see it brighter than yesterday.

Yet I did not know how am I still lost...

Topic(s) of this poem: confusion, lost, wound

Form: Irregular Ode


Poet's Notes about The Poem

After wounded by love, I still strayed between the world of my imagination. I am not sure if I am still in love with her or not. After she shed my heart deep, but it might be better to happened than never, so I could learn something about loving someone.

Note: I'm not sure about Topics and Form of my Poems, after all, I had no formal knowledge about Poetry and Poems. So if someone could help me decide the topic and form of my poem, I would be very grateful. Thank you,
Randy

Comments about Strayed by Randy Littik

  • Souren Mondal (12/5/2015 4:31:00 AM)


    Dear Randy, please don't call me 'Sir', we are both Poets to begin with, hence equals.. And you and I are almost same in age.. So you can call me Souren.

    About the language, buddy, for most of us here, English is not our native language.. For me it's my third language... As a fellow poet and your friend, I would advice you just a simple thing - don't care about 'rules' of writing poems and simply keep writing, you will improve with time, just keep writing and participating here - read poems of other members, comment on them, invite others to read your poems, ask what they say about them, and listen, but do not follow everyone, just those whose suggestions and inputs you feel are worthy of a consideration.. Spend a few months doing this, and your poems will shape better and so will your language.. Until then, and even after that keep writing and engaging in activities...

    Best wishes friend.. Keep it up pal. You will rock!
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    Randy Littik Randy Littik (12/5/2015 8:36:00 AM)

    okay.. i'll keep that in mind.. thank you Souren.

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  • Souren Mondal (12/4/2015 10:09:00 PM)


    Your poem is really nice and well written, particularly the lines-

    'Even the wound could not darken inside me
    I still see it brighter than yesterday.'

    Thank you for sharing...

    ____________

    P: S: As far as having a 'formal' knowledge of poetry and choosing a 'right' form.. It doesn't really matter a great deal my friend. I had been publishing poems here for almost six months now and have 49 poems, never had I cared much about the form and all... Btw, you may add 'love' and 'heartbreak' as a topic here as you had mentioned them in your 'notes' as well as the fact that they are evident in the poem...

    Keep penning poems, keep reading poems, and keep interacting with others; and you will surely improve
    Randy.

    Welcome to PH :)
    Cheers mate :)
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    Randy Littik Randy Littik (12/5/2015 3:43:00 AM)

    Thank you sir for your consideration, I am grateful to know it.
    I think I would learn a lot in PH :)

    PS: Sorry for my bad English. I'll improve it.: D

    Thank you, Sir Souren.

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Poem Submitted: Friday, December 4, 2015



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