Submissive Questions. Comments

I came across this by chance two lips, I love it's tone and flow, very appropriately expressed in your poem. 10 from Tai

Aglaee: Please post a bio. People r curious. Martin

Highly charged and personal. The fourh stanza is 'clunky'. The rhythm is off and I would substitute 'bs' for something more meaningful and less blatant. Also, rewrite the stanza as a four-verse line to balance with the others. Martin

A very personal and well-crafted poem. Has there been a dominant response? Good writing.9 from me, smiling. HDC