The Dungeon And Demons Comments

Cut out a LOT of unnessary words and you got it!

This sounds more like a story than a poem but still it was a very beautiful piece of writing. I enjoyed it thoroughly

In all honesty Joaquin, to me your poem reads more like prose rather than poetry. Nonetheless I think it very atmospheric and wondered have you considered writing a short story about your whole experience and entering it on storywrite. Just a thought. Diana

u very articulately express your fear. one of the purpose of poetry is to be able to be understood, and i think your poem does that for you.

I read your poem Joaquin. I really feel its very good. And I went through each line. It deserves an 'excellent' and that's exactly what's being given by me. I also read your comment on the public bulletin. Just don't worry about any contest Joaquin. Winning these contests is not important. You have great talent. Just keep expressing yourself honestly and people who matter will automatically love your work. Keep Smiling and Keep Walking. Best Regards. Dipy