The Norse Gods Comments

This one speaks to my viking blood my friend... Odin...

I think this is one of your better poems, David. It has a classic feel and tone.Before I go any further, you need to fix the typo in your last line. I like your 'sky of many colors', good image, leaves the reader to fill in the colors. ''Mystic land' has been used too often to work well anymore, but I think it's okay to leave it here. Also, I really like your 'silent splendor' 'recluse to I know not where.' I would change 'to' to 'of'.Mind open to the wonder, I'm not sure about your use of the 'gargoyle' image, especially since right above that you indicate the splendor is not deformed. Overall, I really enjoyed reading this and would like to see a rewrite, tightening up the lines, omitting all superfluous words. I wouldn't change the form, however, as it reads perfectly well as free verse. Keep up the good work, David. best, alicia

I found this poem mystical, beautiful and intriguing. Thankyou David-------Melvina--