Sunday, October 18, 2009

The Storm In My Mind Comments

Rating: 2.8

The anger burns,
with a raging flame,
the heart is played,
like a savage game.
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Virgil Howard
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Jean Dament 18 October 2009

Although it's a sad refrain it is well written with a nice flow to it. It expresses the hurt & pain well within the poem. not sure what you were trying to say 'the engulfs the heart'- maybe 'it engulfs the heart' Ravensong

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