Though I Broke My Promise Comments

great writing, not bad anyway.

Never take to proof the false promises of the beloved The lies she swears upon shall loose its beauty the illusion of love i carry in my head beyond reality o heart dont take me away in soft fantasy of the night and your arms when i woke like a child did i cry the emptiness of the room where only your aroma and perfumes of the bath from your steaming body the promises of the last night dont take to your heart alas but if had taken her necklace in my palm not for me but for the necklace may she return to me to fullfill her promise

nice write! though a suggestion: come out of rhyming by force, it reduces the originality and the expression. idea was great! nice write after all!

nice one..liked readin it...