4 years ago
i dont remember the date or the time
but 1 minute before i see u online
i was a girl
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No expression of geuine passion, can mbe considered a mistake. I know Greenwolfe, and up to now, considered him a blutly honest critiquer, but at the same time, never abashing, or condescending. You acknowledge in your bio, that you are still working on mastering the english language....I look at the above poem, and see a witer, who likes to exercise free verse.You have solid potential...but you do need to get a hold of grammarical command, and spelling. Your poetic themes/storylines are creative & decently structured. Time, reading(as you have been doing) and proof-reading meticulously, before you post your finished product, will soon bare its merits. Commendable work, Negar! fjr
I cannot recommend this because the title does not fit the content . I consider this to be a considerable mistake . GW62
oh dear poet in general ia si told u before the point about ur poem had been delivered, nice poem, and good words. but i don't want to talk a lot u must take care of ur grammatical mistakes. but nice work, keep going.