Too Busy To Notice Poem by Brittanie Thornton

Nice work, Brittanie! (one small suggestion, though: using 'loud' with 'roar' is not necessary) :) Michael

This is crazy good. Great imagery, it flows really well, and you have some great alliteration in there. You should prolly put a comma here - 'Leaves fell, forced by the'. It would sound better. also, 'strong, cold wind' needs a comma. Great job though, I think that it's amazing. While watching the rainfall, The little birds fled to their nests, Leaves fell-, - forced by the strong-, - cold wind, Lighting struck, -and- thunder followed with a loud roar As the storm came-, - big and glorious-.- Life went on as if nothing ever happened

Wonderful. Life goes on no matter what.