Saturday, April 6, 2013

Unaltered Flirtations Comments

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Words esacpe my lips unfiltered,
Coming straight from the core of my being...
Not edited in any way shape or form,
Dedicated only to you.
...
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John Richey
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Sandy Player 07 April 2013

Present progressive tense (plus many verbs) gives the sense of being continually pounded. Perhaps by the rush of everything you have to say? Not a topic I am overly keen on but that can't stop it from being a good poem. And as it is personal poetry, all that matters is what it means to you.

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