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Quite right about 'cool'. I changed it. Thanks for your criticism.

I like this a lot Tanec. This has a great atmopsphere to it and is well paced. I think that the word 'cool' in the first line, second stanza, takes something away from the piece. It seems that the theme deals with the plasticity of human relations, and in this sense I feel that something that emphasises the contriveness might be more fitting. All in all this is a really well written poem.