luke stanley owen

Where The Guns Cry

As my dad drinks a beer
my brother eats cereal
i write a poem
I can only hear guns cry over the birds sweetest voice
as a man screams
in pain
and I cry as it hapens.

Poem Submitted: Friday, October 16, 2009
Poem Edited: Saturday, October 17, 2009

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  • Nicola Owen (10/19/2009 2:45:00 AM)

    Well done Luke keep it upx

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  • Carol Gall (10/17/2009 2:22:00 PM)

    great first poem luke keep writing

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  • Tai Chi Italy (10/17/2009 9:24:00 AM)

    Hello Luke, I am impressed by your first poem here! You are a very young poet, but if your dad is a poet too, I am not surprised you are writing poetry too. You express very well how you feel about the terrors of war and what is important to a young soul such as yourself. Well done. I hope we can bring some peace to your world sooner than later.

    Keep writing and one day you will be as good as your father, who I know is a fine poet.

    Smiling at you

    Tai

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  • Cia Frizzell (10/16/2009 7:47:00 PM)

    It is good to see that there are young people out there that care about what is going on in the world... it is even better when they share their feelings and thoughts with others through writing.... keep up the good work.

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  • Raynette Eitel (10/16/2009 5:00:00 PM)

    Dear Luke,

    You think like and poet and write like a poet...so of course that means you are a poet. Keep writing and keep saying things in unusual ways for that is what poets do. When you said you 'hear' guns 'cry, ' then I knew you were a poet. Well done!

    Raynette Eitel

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  • Thomas Arthur Rimbaud (10/16/2009 4:11:00 PM)

    dear luke just wanted to let you know that i really liked this poem, you are a really good poet, and i wish i could write as good as you. you are great! ! ! !

    from

    Thomas

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  • Marieta MaglasMarieta Maglas (10/16/2009 3:28:00 PM)

    nice simile:
    ''I can only hear guns cry over the birds sweetest voice
    as a man screams
    in pain ''
    nice poem...................

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  • Vincent James Turner (10/16/2009 2:23:00 PM)

    Dear Luke, if its true that you are only still a young lad, then you have a real future ahead of you in regards to writing poems. In this poem your use of words is really good, and you set the scene really well by opening the poem with some fine images about your father and brother. i love the line about the 'birds sweetest voice' You are a true poet and will hopefully become as great as me! ! ! !

    lots of love

    DAD

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