Who Is She? ? Poem by Eman Awad

Who Is She? ?



Is she the girl who's getting you over me,
or you already are and she is just the one? ?
By her side, do you imagine your life till eternity,
and our dreams, are they all over and gone? ?
Do you smile when you linger her name,
while mine is just another name mentioned through.
When she says the words, do you feel the same,
do you fly when she says that she really missed you?
Or am i just seeing things my way,
and she is just a friend and i'm still in your heart?
If only you knew, how bad is my day,
when i see you together and i get torn apart...

Who is she,
are you already off to some one new?
Who is she,
i cry all night knowing that i had you?
It's so hard for me, i can't bare,
you told me that i'm the only one.
Her's and mine, can you compare?
and our dreams, are they all over and gone?
All that she's getting was mine,
she's taking my place in my own dream.
That wound won't be healed by the time,
and even if it did, it will only become a seam.
I'm not asking you to return to me,
but who is she? ?

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
John Yamrus 01 November 2007

hi Eman; this isn't half bad...but you're making some terrible mistakes in both your spelling and punctuation... 'Do you smile when you linger her name, ' that makes absolutely no sense at all...correctly, a name may LINGER in your thoughts or a person may linger, but 'when you linger her name' is just plain b.a.d. 'That wound won't be healed by the time, and even if it did, it will only become a seam.' do you perhaps mean 'won't be healed BY time'? and by 'seam', are you implying a scar? imprecise. 'Her's and mine' should read 'hers'. this is all little stuff, but, taken together in can absolutely kill something creative and honest and new. just pay a little more attention to the small details and the larger aspects of the poem will work themselves out. i assure you. john yamrus

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