You Created These Creatures Comments

Great poem. The very last sentence has just a few words too many to be a coherent strong finish. I'd lose the last line, or the one above it. You don't want the reader having to hesitate for even a tenth-of-a-second as he reaches the end. Of course, that's just my impression, a gut reaction, but those are the ones I trust, and if your gut ever tells YOU something about one of MY poems, please feel free to unload. Some parts of your poem have me in awe. The dark tortoise and the waking, walking in snow lines added a depth and cryptic beauty to your poem that was both beautiful and a pleasure to absorb.