Do you ever look at someone and wonder,
All the heartbreak they've endured,
How their heart was torn into
a hundred little pieces?
...
Flashing lights -
the stars dance through the treetops
- encircle me
As the lake throws back their image,
...
Your eyes the blue of deep waters
The center of your pupil
Are depths of ocean abyss
No light escapes from its pull of
...
Death sticks to me
like a coat in the rain.
At the end of the street,
Death waits for me
...
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Pieces
Do you ever look at someone and wonder,
All the heartbreak they've endured,
How their heart was torn into
a hundred little pieces?
It's funny,
From the surface they look so whole.