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Alison Cassidy

(6th August,1945 / Melbourne, Australia)

Black Holes


I lifted my foot...

and it appeared
from nowhere
A hole
A deep black hole
deeper than the deepest mineshaft

Mum had warned me about them
over and over
(So deep you'd never reach the bottom - so don't go too close!)

I stopped
in panic
and turned...

and there
in front of me
was another
and another
and another

I was surrounded by them
hundreds of them
deep black holes
deep black holes
of
FEAR

There was nowhere to go
so I stood
immobile
face white
heart beating like a demented drummer

And suddenly...
the ground opened
and I felt myself falling
down my very own Alice in Wonderland rabbit hole

F
A
L
L
I
N
G

into
nothingness...

Submitted: Saturday, February 17, 2007
Edited: Tuesday, January 18, 2011

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  • Jim Foulk (4/11/2007 2:25:00 PM)

    this was a great poem alison, it kept me going and going, and i almost fell down that hole with you, but phew! what write, and what a nightmare that must have been, you are such a fine poet, this is one of your best, you have wrote so many good ones i can't put them in order. i give it a ten. (Report) Reply

  • Original Unknown Girl (3/1/2007 6:07:00 AM)

    I love this Allie, the way in which you convey even the slightest of things just gives your thoughts a life of their own! This dream.... it could've been anyone's worst nightmare but you tell it with such eloquence! ! I'm very interested in what dreams mean so this one really hits the mark! ! (Jack's version are extremely humorous! !)
    Great read and a great write too, as ever! HG: -) xx (Report) Reply

  • Duncan Wyllie (2/24/2007 6:33:00 AM)

    This is a very interesting poem, a friend of mine was telling me that their young girl had
    a reaccurring dream just like this one, she was very afraid of her own bedroom in the end
    Take care sweetheart, plesent dreams
    Love duncan X (Report) Reply

  • Robert Howard (2/23/2007 10:13:00 AM)

    Yikes! So vividly crafted. Note to myself: don't visit Alison's nightmares, they're dangerous! ! (Report) Reply

  • alice sunderland (2/23/2007 4:07:00 AM)

    scary. all i ever do is 'trip over the kerb' in my dreams. i dont think i'd swap you.

    great to read though! alxx (Report) Reply

  • Not a member No 4 (2/22/2007 5:41:00 PM)

    Allie, this is good, this is very good! ! Captures the nightmarish experience to perfection! ! ! xx jim (Report) Reply

  • Jerry Hughes (2/19/2007 10:47:00 PM)

    ...how many times have I told you Alphonse, don't eat yippie-beans just before going to bed. Well writ nightmare though (Report) Reply

  • R H (2/19/2007 2:56:00 PM)

    An excellent recreation of a theme that dominates many recurring dreams. The underlying insecurity and anxiety in this dream in which you have no control grips the reader and takes them to that fearful place. Superb composition Allie. Justine (Report) Reply

  • *Mandy * (2/17/2007 12:28:00 PM)

    I think everyone fears falling into the dark. I love the way you write! I can really relate


    Mandy (Report) Reply

  • jack russell (2/17/2007 5:35:00 AM)

    These deep black holes could be the nightmare of your mother having your tonsils stolen for no good reason! That is not to say (getting myself into trouble here) that your mouth is huge, or bottomless, or...I'd better stop digging more holes :) 'Falling' dreams/nightmares are, I am told, common; the reason escapes me...
    Great drama here, Allie, and I love the 'demented drummer' line...perfectly graphic!
    Hugz
    jack :) (Report) Reply

  • Sandy Jensen (2/17/2007 5:28:00 AM)

    this poem is beautifully formatted allie...i love the way you describe your dream like state...it appears so real....as often the dreaming state is...i could see the holes around you as you turned..a great little read...love sandyxxx (Report) Reply

  • Séamus Fox (2/17/2007 3:05:00 AM)

    Alison this is pretty mad not just one crazy recurring dream but two! ! ! Even in your sleep you were being creative! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Declan McHenry (2/17/2007 2:59:00 AM)

    Fear. It really puts the frighteners on so much, otherwise, everyday activity. Well captured Alison. (Report) Reply

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