Palas Kumar Ray

Rookie - 243 Points (India)

If Instead! - Poem by Palas Kumar Ray

If instead had you said, how impatiently you waited for me
If instead could I say, very calmly I didn't at all wait for you.

If instead had you said, how earnestly you thought for me
If instead could I say, very smartly I didn't at all think for you.

If instead had you said, how sincerely you cared for me
If instead could I say, very boldly I didn't at all care for you.

If instead had you said, how eagerly you longed for me
If instead could I say, very carelessly I didn't at all long for you.

If instead had you said, how lonely you felt for me
If instead could I say, very indifferently I didn't at all feel for you.

If instead had you said, how every moment you died for me
If instead could I say, very honestly I didn't at all die for you.

If instead had you said, how badly you missed me
If instead could I say, very surely I didn't at all miss you.

If instead had you said, how deeply you loved me
If instead could I say, very thankfully I didn't at all love you.

If instead would you have written this poem for me
If instead would I have not read this poem at all for you.






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Comments about If Instead! by Palas Kumar Ray

  • Rookie Duncan Wyllie (11/24/2008 4:39:00 PM)

    Great structure, repeating pattern, thoughtful!

    Love duncan X (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie Sarwar Chowdhury (11/24/2008 1:36:00 PM)

    Really great!
    thoughtful indeed!
    sukritee ba mononshilotar charcha ebhabei kobi'r hat theke beriey ase!
    10+++

    (new mine 'My naked beauty said-') (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Mark Nwagwu (11/24/2008 2:36:00 AM)

    'If instead' of fighting, we spent time on reaching agreements; If instead of religious intolerance leading to suicide bombings, we planted flowers in each other's gardens, If instead of writing this comment, I went off to have some coffee.. this world would be a different place - I'm writing this comment, instead of going off to coffee - I can bring my coffee here. this is thought-provoking and enchanting - my 10, Kumar (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sandra Fowler (11/17/2008 3:05:00 PM)

    'If' becomes two letters of immense importance in this excellent poem.
    Fascinating dialogue between two souls who long to reach out to
    each other if only they could. Ten for you.

    Warm regards,

    Sandra (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 646 Points Marilyn Lott (11/15/2008 11:22:00 AM)

    We can always count on your fresh lovely approach to life in your poems, Palas. A '10! ' from me as well.

    Warm Wishes,
    Marilyn (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Rehab Helmy (11/14/2008 5:37:00 AM)

    well, understanding is a good bless but sometimes we say if only....
    good work & keep writing (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Min Sia (11/14/2008 5:30:00 AM)

    You really have made me love all your poems! A 10..definitely! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, November 14, 2008

Poem Edited: Saturday, June 7, 2014


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