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Looking Up. (July 15,1999 / Barinas)
Is life worth it? - Friends
You stop abruptly and stare, thinking again,
I stand motionless in my lair, is life a game?
It's so confusing I want to lay still, and slowly die from the chill,
It's so sweet and so sly, you don't know how to fly.
As a canyon of sorrow, waits for tomorrow,
To slowly rise, make mountains be high.
It's so confusing when going back to reality,
When you start to get pulled by gravity.
Life is a bipolar game,
Don't be afraid don't let it be tamed.
If life was a game, you would never play right,
If things weren't so lame, the atmosphere wouldn't be so light.
I walked by,
And you caught my eye.
We talked and finished with a bye,
I felt once again life.
For every misery hidden,
In all the darkness yet not forgiven.
Even if there's no fine linen
There will always be happiness given,
If you can't afford it,
If you can't stop it.
If you can't do it,
If you can't choose it.
Thinking it's just to sell and buy
Is life a bargain?
Stop and think about your friends waving goodbye,
And feel light once again.
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Are you happy?
Keep your luck.
Are you lost?
Keep Looking Up.
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I'm very sad by your poem
I'm very (x10^8) late so sorry! I only remembered the invite to read your poem when sifting thrkugh me messages and coming by yon message by chance!
It's certainly quite a heavy poem and it comes across in it's depth and reading flow too. The first stanzas were my favourite though, before the weight started to shape the poem. In those lines it feels like you're playing a dangerous game just contemplating life and the utter confusion was neatly pictured in the desire to do absolutely nothing which is an accurate presentation of truth but it would have been nicer to have seen a further investigation into it there as it remains alongside the rest of the poem all the way through.
On the whole, good thoughts and words to write them with especially regarding your age and where most people (ok yeah, me then; I ADMIT! !) have their heads in those years.
I'm lost in the labyrinth of your poem. Totally.
Im impressed...very imressed loved reading your poem, thank you for letting me know about your writes
A very wise poem for a young man like you, I see bright future ahead of you when it comes to poetry.
:) I can say this much...IT WAS AN ENJOYABLE READ. I really liked it.
wow! nice composure for a 13 year old i.m awed keep it up... DDP
Great lines of wisdom with lovely rhythm and flow amazing write for your age, you show so much talent in this creative write! !
Thanks for inviting me, this work is perfect in everything you try to do, in words, meaning and the flow...you are talented in such at this young age...i am nothing like you when i was at your age, you will growing up with much more talents and things to share, i believe that..so keep writing and doing well always! _Soul
10+..............................a creative poem that really draws me in :) but I don't understand the title. Read it a couple of times. Keep it up.
Love this line:
Life is a bipolar game
because life can seem crazy o_0