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Against My Will

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As I fall down in your heart's ocean,
as I go deeper,
I realize there is a little chance to get up.
There is hardly any intention to stop going down.
I fell in the deepest,
and now you're pulling me up,
Against my will.


Note: The poem got published in the anthology 'Apple Fruits of an Old Oak' (2016) from USA.
Against My Will
Saturday, October 21, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: love,sadness,separation
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Bri Edwards 07 March 2020
4 - Perhaps you are saying the one 'you' love, and are separated from, is causing you sadness as she/he is trying to remove YOU from her/his " heart" ? If he/she has removed you from HER/HIS heart, you may be out of luck. 'You' may have to look for love elsewhere. bri :)
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Bri Edwards 07 March 2020
3 - So i say you should have a noun in your poem which " deepest" modifies. e.g. deepest PART of your heart I don't understand, & i like simpler language (usually) without symbolism.
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Bri Edwards 07 March 2020
2 - *** " n. The part of speech that modifies a noun or other substantive by limiting, qualifying, or specifying and distinguished in English morphologically by one of several suffixes, such as -able, -ous, -er, and -est, or syntactically by position directly preceding a noun or nominal phrase. & n. Any of the words belonging to this part of speech, such as white in the phrase a white house. "
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Bri Edwards 07 March 2020
1 - With some confidence in my use of English (for nearly 70 years) i say: " there is a little chance to get up" & " there is little chance to get up" have different meanings, with the first indicating there is a small chance, and the second indicating there is " almost no" chance. Also: Maybe " deepest" CAN be a noun. I'm not sure. I call " deepest" an adjective ***
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Me Poet Yeps Poet 15 April 2019
WOW DEEEEEEEEEEP YET SAD YOU COULDN'T NICE ALL UR POEMS ARE FOR PUBLICATION READ MINE SOME
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Abu Sufian 15 April 2019
Thanks. I will read yours. Wish you all the best with your writing...
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