And My Heart Feels Heavy Again Poem by Rusha Manandhar
And My Heart Feels Heavy Again
Had it not been you,
I'd never make this breakthrough,
With your uplifting and your trust,
I achieved everything in a just.
Once, we were best of friends,
Swore to never let this end,
Our friendship was all so true,
My heart aches, missing you.
Smiles always accompanied us,
A perfect you for me, a wuss,
We, together vanquished all our pain,
But now my heart feels heavy again.
When the flower was blooming so well,
One after another the petals fell,
There I sat, all so clueless,
Contented with hunch I was blessed.
When I flew so high around,
I failed to look at the ground,
And hence I lost my dear friend,
So precious, to an unnoticed end
AND MY HEART FEELS HEAVY AGAIN
(cont.) THE WORD JUST: 'just jŭst adjective: 1 - Honorable and fair in one's dealings and actions: synonym: fair. 2 - Consistent with what is morally right; righteous.3 - Properly due or merited.'
Last stanza: more symbolism I 'LOVE' the last line, a repetition of your title with CAPITAL LETTERS used, I suppose, for emphasis. PLEASE do something [EDIT, EDIT] about 'just'. ***** five stars
I suppose the words 'flower' and 'petals' are used symbolically to refer to a human relationship, I think friendship. I'm not a fan of symbolism and rarely, if ever, intentionally use it, though it can be a useful poetic tool.
stanza 4: line 4: IF 'clueless' is meant to rhyme with 'blessed', I'll say it is really 'reaching' for a rhyme, BUT I don't mind at all, as long as the stanza. and lines make sense. And they may make sensse: I'm not sure. BUT i'd put 'a' in front of 'hunch' and maybe 'that' after 'hunch'. : )
(cont.) THE WORD WUSS: 'wuss woo͝s noun A person regarded as weak, ineffectual, or overly fearful. A weak or ineffectual person. A person who is physically weak and ineffectual.' : )
stanza 3: I SMILED when I read the word 'wuss'. It's been MANY YEARS since I've heard that word! I like it. And having read more, I FIND IT HARD TO BELIEVE that you knowingly used 'just' as you did. ;) (cont.)
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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line 4: I believe you either left out a word following 'just' OR you used 'just' as a noun, which I don't think is proper English usage of 'just, which I believe is meant to be ONLY USED as an ADJECTIVE. (cont.)