Berto 2 Poem by Kayla Ruiz

Berto 2



dazed and confused i can not rise above
the spell you put me under for i fell in love
the masculence, the tenderness, the beauty i saw inside
you withdrawl all those things but theres one you can not hide
through your eyes it flows it doesn't seem to end
the love that you sent to my heart tenderly does it mend
to prove my love to you i did just this
i tattooed your name on the inside of my lips
every word that just passed my lips i dedicate to you
this is just my way of showing my love for you is real

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Milica Franchi De Luri 13 September 2009

loving someone is good, but tattooing the inside of the lips..........just too painful. your poem is nice it just need some editing. This is how i would do it Dazed and confused, I can not rise above the spell you put me under, for i fell in love. The masculines, the tenderness, the beauty i saw inside. You withdrew all those things, but there is one you can not hide. Through your eyes it flows, it doesn't seem to end it's the love you sent to my heart tenderly. To proof my love to you i did just this; I tattooed your name inside my lips. Every word that pass through them now i dedicate to you. This is my way of showing you, my love for you is real

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