Best Friends Forever? Poem by Paige Nielsen

Best Friends Forever?

Rating: 4.8


Forgive of me my poison pen
Venomous and bitter
You and I now poison friends
So much to consider

Your image conjured in my mind
Burns deep my wretched eye
Relief a balm I cannot find
Fair countenance a shallow lie

It hurts to scream, curse, and weep
Your name, unspeakable agony
Too much alike, it went too deep
By turns, wrath and melancholy

I miss you like a breath of air
I cannot sleep for fear of dreams
Cut to bone, my heart laid bare
Friendship is not all it seems

Wednesday, April 1, 2009
Topic(s) of this poem: friendship
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Amanda Jackson 08 April 2009

And you said you couldn't rhyme.... Very well done darling! I really love the feeling you put into it.

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Catina Crum 08 April 2009

The emotional quality in this blows me away. Substantial. It flows so well, and the poem progresses nicely into your ending thought: 'Friendship is not all it seems' Pathos, darling, Pathos... Lovely, darling. Just find and dandy. Constructive Criticism: I can feel a hint of phrases Ive heard before, but no matter because this poem is your own Imagery: Great. Literary devices: YEAH! Content: Oh, man.

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