Betrayal Poem by Alc Harris

Betrayal

Rating: 5.0


Betrayal...
Sticks in the throat,
till death to choke.
After the knives
comes the ache
sad farewell
to what once was.

Wednesday, November 2, 2005
Topic(s) of this poem: betrayal,farewell,sad
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Joseph Harskamp 26 September 2006

the last two lines killed the flow of this piece, which was pretty alright until that point. this short of a poem would definitly benefit from a ryhme scheme of some sort. re-write it again with ryhme and skill and maybe you could have a poem.

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Charles Chaim Wax 02 November 2005

the mystery of pain need to grap it before it grabs us nice work!

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