Wednesday, September 23, 2015

Bogged Down Comments

Rating: 4.5

Screaming and rioting in your mind

Turned blind by the mass hysteria
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Ben Paterson
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Pamela Sinicrope 15 October 2015

Found poem! Interesting how you were able to cull together this poem with such significant meaning. When I first read it, I was thinking how unique your word choices were yet how effective in conveying the meaning the theme. I also like the transitions between you and the 'group.' The last two lines are fantastic! I would love to hear more about how you put this together in your notes. And the title, aptly describing your poem, is it also 'found? ' Well done. Bravo!

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Chinedu Dike 07 October 2015

Indeed, every mammal has it complexion, and to envisage life without difficulties is an existential absurdity. Life at very low ebb well depicted in the poem. A nicely encapsulated piece of poetry well penned. Thanks for sharing Ben.

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Kelly Kurt 23 September 2015

Deep and written well. Thanks, Ben

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