But Poem by Chyenne Noyb

But



You try, it's called Earth
It's a grass green place
You fail, it's called Life
And it's a race
But sometimes you get picked up,
Held too close for seperation
This line won't rhyme.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Tam Lin 05 October 2007

Hey, I'm really leaning towards taking out just the last line. I don't think it's necessary and furthermore it has an overly simplistic sound (I think) , which kinda spoils the niceness of the rest of the poem. What do you think?

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Chyenne Noyb

Chyenne Noyb

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