Wednesday, February 1, 2006

Buttered Buns Comments

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Buttered buns are banes to hearts
in cars that, even hybridized,
are worse than horses and their carts,
though leather customized.
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gershon hepner
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Gina Onyemaechi 01 February 2006

That's better! : -) Kind regards, Gina.

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Gina Onyemaechi 01 February 2006

Strong, powerfully-communicated message, Gersh...but I think I'll carry on doing the 'buttered bun' thing. I love driving! ! ! Listen, I'd enjoy this poem more if line 6 verse 2 had a rhyming line...but that's up to you. High-impact (pun unintended!) and unsettling (inevitably, that's the whole idea isn't it) write. Kind regards, Gina.

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