Cutting Cold & Gigantic Goals Poem by Amine Fadil

Beautiful truth expressed artistically...thanks for sharing

You invented a striking metaphor to identify yourself as a poet, namely, WORDS' KNIGHT, for what are we poets if not knights of the words on a quest for the deeper and wider meanings we can find, express in verse and give to others. This poem came to you at a tense time with many stresses in your life, including exams. I'm reeminded that the American poet Robert Frost said poems are places of order we create in a chaotic world. That's what your poem does: it tells the truth about your situation, which is a stressful place, but then it presents itself as a shining example of the creativity with which you will prevail over that situation. I feel stronger for having read it!

i am sending comments to you in a message about your use of the words dim, drank, and reign. Preset preparations for exhausting exams marches on. .... i feel that the preparations are marching, so since preparations is plural i would use march, not marches...........as in soldiers march on vs. a soldier marches on. ===================== speaking of soldiers...........i have heard the noun dragoon rarely (very rarely!) , and i don't remember EVER hearing dragoon used as a verb, BUT i did find these definitions for it as a verb; i doubt you will hear american-born americans using the word. 2 dragoon verb Definition of DRAGOON transitive verb 1 : to subjugate or persecute by harsh use of troops 2 : to force into submission or compliance especially by violent measures See dragoon defined for English-language learners » Examples of DRAGOON [she was dragooned into agreeing to the fraudulent scheme] First Known Use of DRAGOON 1689 Related to DRAGOON Synonyms blackjack, coerce, compel, constrain, force, drive, impel, impress, make, muscle, obligate, oblige, press, pressure, sandbag - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - my favorite line so far: And to embrace the blanket's wonderful warmth. ....i like to sleep! :) ================== at first i did not understand why you would write: Life is null with no dreams, and goals. .............that is because i misunderstood how to read it. i'm sure now that you want it to mean that life is null *** (the use of null sounds funny/strange to me here, but look at the definition i've pasted below and it can make sense) if it doesn't have dreams and goals [i wouldn't use the comma after dreams.] i suggest writing Life is null [worthless? ; meaningless? ] WITHOUT dreams and goals. *** null n?l/ adjective adjective: null 1. having no legal or binding force; invalid. the establishment of a new interim government was declared null and void synonyms: invalid, null and void, void; annulled, nullified, canceled, revoked their marriage was declared null antonyms: valid 2. having or associated with the value zero. Mathematics (of a set or matrix) having no elements, or only zeros as elements. lacking distinctive qualities; having no positive substance or content. his curiously null life synonyms: invalid, null and void, void; More annulled, nullified, canceled, revoked their marriage was declared null antonyms: valid noun literary noun: null; plural noun: nulls 1. a zero. a dummy letter in a cipher. Electronics a condition of no signal. a direction in which no electromagnetic radiation is detected or emitted. verb Electronics verb: null; 3rd person present: nulls; past tense: nulled; past participle: nulled; gerund or present participle: nulling 1. combine (a signal) with another in order to create a null; cancel out. ================================ =============================== ok, now that i've given you some pointers as requested, i'll comment on the poem other than the word usage. it sounds like you were trying to avoid more late-night studying for exams. it was a late, gloomy, rainy night with only dogs and drunks on the streets. you (or whoever was speaking) had physical or mental pain and were cold. what a combination! the warm bed, or soon-to-be-warmed-by-your-body bed was beckoning. i get the picture. i used to take naps during the afternoons in college and still sleep at night. no wonder i flunked out! ! ! BUT you have goals and dreams in life for which you will sacrifice some sleep and warmth, until it is just too late and too cold to resist the blanket! ! ! and you believe that one is never too old to have dreams and to accomplish great goals. i nice spelling out of a philosophy for living, with extra information thrown in for good measure. i did like the pairing of words with same consonants in the first two stanzas. it could be a fun exercise in elocution. i think elocution will work there. i'm glad you stopped having so much fun while writing the final stanza. unfortunately i did not enjoy it the first time i read it as i was too busy critiquing it. i look forward to reading more of your english writing as you build up your knowledge and skills of my native language. good work. thanks for sharing. bri :)