Dalliance Poem by Kyle Costa

Dalliance

What small hands pointing at the placard, I note,
while noting towered labiates of smoke clouds: abrupt.
Sun run on & on & on,
finally finding finality in a pair of small hands, cupped.

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Bri Edwards 22 August 2023

LABIATES: 'adjective Having lips or liplike parts. Having or characterizing flowers with the corolla divided into liplike parts. Of or belonging to the mint family.

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Bri Edwards 22 August 2023

(CONT.) Labiates reminds me of the in female human anatomy. : 'The (SG: labium) are the major externally visible portions of the .' Yes, referred to as 'lips'. bri : )

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Bri Edwards 22 August 2023

PLACARD: 'placard plăk′ärd″, -ərd noun A sign or notice for display in a public place. A small card or plaque, such as a nameplate on a door.'

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Bri Edwards 22 August 2023

line 2: I might use 'towering'. I like the alliterations in 'finally finding finality'. (cont.)

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Bri Edwards 22 August 2023

(cont.) re 'finally finding finality': alliteration: 'the repetition of usually initial consonant sounds in two or more neighboring words or syllables (such as wild and woolly, threatening throngs) called also head rhyme, initial rhyme ' I never heard 'head rhyme' or 'initial rhyme'.

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Bri Edwards 23 August 2023

(cont.) Please don't 'let' the definitions of 'dalliance' keep you from expanding your poem. 'Expansion' may well be good for the poem. bri ;)

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Bri Edwards 23 August 2023

AND maybe soon my earlier-sent comments will show up. (cont.)

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Bri Edwards 23 August 2023

Kyle, as promised: 'dalliance dăl′ē-əns noun Casual romantic or sexual activity. A casual or brief romantic or sexual relationship. A brief involvement or interest in something.'.....

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Bri Edwards 22 August 2023

re the title: 'dalliance dăl′ē-əns noun Casual romantic or sexual activity. A casual or brief romantic or sexual relationship. A brief involvement or interest in something.' It's an 'interesting-but-not-clear, for me, poem'. Thanks for sharing. : ) Welcome 'New Poet' to PH. bri

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Bri Edwards 22 August 2023

I wonder if the pointing hands in line one are the same hands as the cupped hands in line 4. Hm? And who do they belong to?

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