Tuesday, November 15, 2005

Dinner Last Night Comments

Rating: 4.0

What did I have for my dinner last night
and what did I talk about while we were eating?
Who was the one who prepared every bite
and saved the leftovers perhaps for reheating?
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Declan McHenry 15 November 2005

I liked the flow of this and the meter and rhyme carried me along nicely. My sole reservation was the reference to Caesar which, while fitting in beautifully with the rhyme and being a fair metaphor for the courses, distracted me from the subject matter. Personal opinion only. Otherwise, it was a cracking read.

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***** ********* 15 November 2005

Sweet realisation huh gershon? Better late than never I say. There are two dranks on line 12. 9 from Tai

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