Phichet Trisiripisal

Dna Love

I am trying to write an English poem, but I don't know how. If this 'poem' is not a poem, can someone help me to comment on how to improve to make it more like a poem. Thanks.
This poem is about a girl I met in college but we never ends up together. I just want to ask her for forgiveness for my mistakes in the past and marry me.
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I don't know where to start this letter
to make thing between us a little better
for you always told me to be friend forever
and that always give me a 'Leky' fever

I can't recall our first meet at the ABAC university
for I had a girlfriend who seemed to eternity.
One day in Sophomore, I realized in harmony,
that I was wrong missing you crazily.

On the midnight of New Year Eve,
I took the nerve to call you as the seed
asking you out for a walk in delightful please
But you frankly denied me it was wrong indeed

And we talked about places that we had been,
I tell you how beautiful moutain I had seen,
you showed how your Mun Island was so keen
So, I dreamed both us in the beautiful scenes.

For the sake of my girlfriend, I tried to stop.
But your face kepts coming pushed and popped.
so finally I decided not to make any drop.
and call you again for another New Year sob.

If there were millions of stars tonight,
I asked for one to listen as it might,
because my heart was so burning inside,
praying for just one insight.

For tonight, I had just make my heart a confession,
and you were listening in your friendly fashion.
Everything was like a dream in passion.
But I was still left in unknown tension.

Would tomorrow be one happy time to share
or would it be a hundred thousands sadness with no care
So please let me know as the clear morning air
for endless moment was a torment beyond bear.

And you killed me straight from your gentle heart,
with your words piercing mine like an electric dart.
my heart weakens in the state of the no art.
and time had left our relationship floating apart.

In classes and labs, I hided you my signt and admire,
watching you from a distance in desire.
Just wishing you could be mine without expired.
And now graduating from Intania 381 became a dire.

For you had implanted memory in my Alz brain.
For you in Engineering blue was so hard for me to refrain.
And your smile was my life proliferate gain.
With no other women could ever bargain.

For time had past, and many girls had came in and out.
Knowing them was fun but none to talk about.
Sorry for crossing two lines, not to insult.
Please forgive me, I am sorry with no doubt.

If I could turn back time,
I would change our life rhythm and rhymes
And put our connection with rose mary and thyme.
And cook you Thai roasted chicken with lime.

I would please and beg and kneel,
to nervously ask you to marry me,
and had our own children of three
for you are the only woman I want to see

For you are my every songs I hear,
and you are romantic movies I watched to tears.
For my missing you was like light travelling for years,
So would you please marry me, my dear?

Poem Submitted: Wednesday, December 2, 2009

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Comments about Dna Love by Phichet Trisiripisal

  • Ari D (12/7/2009 8:27:00 AM)

    Good poem.
    Good love forever for a girl. i i

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  • Paula Paula (12/7/2009 7:22:00 AM)

    great poem, even i guessed wrong.555
    i can feel that you r so in loved with this girl.

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