Frozen Poem by Star Dust

Star Dust

Star Dust

Loonytown (It's an awesome place, right between Candyland and the Strawberry Forest)
Star Dust
Loonytown (It's an awesome place, right between Candyland and the Strawberry Forest)

Frozen

Rating: 5.0


Degrees dropping,
Ice shattering,
Like delicate glass,
In an arctic ending,

Mysterious black,
Blinding white,
Glowing blue,
Drifting in a star filled night,

Closed eyes, never opening,
Passing over the days,
Steps never taken,
Caught up in a phase,

Frozen solid,
Staring straight ahead,
With a thought paused in your mind,
Always stuck, on the line of dead,

What happened then,
Is happening now,
Frozen in a time,
Never knowing how.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
<font color=black>Nagourta 24 October 2008

Listen to the other's comments, they critiqued you fine. I suggest you edit this and make 'artic' spelled 'arctic' I am sure that you meant to...

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Nicole J 23 October 2008

wow. that's really good. i like it. i haven't seen snow since i was a year old, but i could see it with your poem.

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