Girlfriend Poem by sholadoye Dada

Girlfriend

Rating: 5.0


My girlfriend
I look at you, I see paradise
Adoration in your eyes
How I wish you are eternal
Your touch feels glorious
Your speech is like heaven speaks!
You’re worth a goddess

I’d always wished to marry you
But your beauty
I don’t know how much dowry
Words cannot communicate your beauty
Each time, I look at you till varnish
Yelling for your company
Wanting it to be continual

Having you today, I’m sure I do
Touching you tomorrow remains a fret
Girlfriend, maybe girlfoe incursion
But I’m prepared for the shock of exodus
I’d always foreseen it will sure come
I had always known girls
Moreover, their validity

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
John Knight 23 December 2009

Hi Sholadoye - This is a well honed poem on a topic all men can relate to. It scores a TEN for structure and content. V 1 Really poses a Universal dilemma - is any mere male worthy of the least of women. they are in adifferent class by virtue of their beauty - texture - speech - eyes and capacity for pure love. 'You're worth a godess'. V 2 Despite our apparent aversion to monogamy - most men do wish to get married especially when they meet a Godess. I have two beautiful daughters and six beautiful granddaughters and i am more aware of their beauty and value than any would be suitor. So i do demand a dowery - not in cattle or land - but the character of a man mete (fit - suitable) to be worthy of their hand. My son-in-laws did come to ask me 'could they marry my daughters' ans as an English father I had the right to say no. My father in law did say no in 1955 (just to put it into historical context) to a former suitor of my wife even thouh she was 20. the English can be FEUDAL when they please even in the 21st C. 'I'd always wished to marry you'. V 3 Poses the dilemma - it needs diplomacy the GIRLFRIEND can become GIRLFOE - Us mere men have to be prepraed for rejection and disappointment 'But I'm prepared for the shock of exodus' This is strak l; ine of realism in a very Romantic Poem - EXCELLENT. Yours in poetry - JOHN

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Kai c. 23 December 2009

awwwwww. she's lucky to have you

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