Her attention's the hardest thing to win
But she freely gives it to others
I'm a warrior fighting for that thin'
And I'd shed blood and tears
Her attention is gold
I'm dying just to have it
Like a treasure untold
My heart longs for it
well it got some kind of flair to it. It may need a little more to give it the Zink that will launce it into orbit so as to make it intrigued
You are young brother poet and it is always like this when one is young. It was so with me too. I wish you all the best in your endeavors to gain her attention. But, junior, let me tell you that getting her attention isn't all that great in this great world of ours. You are likely to meet many more and crave again for attention. I don't want to philosophize on the issue. Go ahead and enjoy. But never ever cry if 'she' doesn't care. All the best for this lovely love poem. I will give you 10 even if she doesn't bestow her attention on you. Is that enough?
'freely gives it' is correct. I'd like to know why she's not giving it to you, so the poem could do with expanding, Jr
Great poem....women see everything we just chose not to tell men...I know why are women so cruel :)
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
When treated with a smile, the tears always dry. A smile attracts one other smile, if lucky, gather more, get sprinkled with some laugh. And laugh is gold for all: mind body and soul. Thank you for sharing an inspiring poem.