I Miss In Garden Poem by Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal
I Miss In Garden
I asked her to come near
And silently hear
But she had her own fears
She gently responded 'dear'?
I wanted her to speak
Even with feeble voice or weak
I shall always stick
Even though chances are bleak
I shall politely say
But never go away
She must respond
Accept it gracefully and second
I am aware
That she simply dares
Opts for my beautiful company
That was longed by many
I know I am love bird
But always look forward
For kind heart and friendship
That is ideal way to board on ship
How many are lucky enough to sail thorough?
What makes them to feel true?
I wonder no one may answer honestly
It is never enjoyed by them really
I may sing a song
Beautiful one for not going wrong
I may be alone in this beautiful journey
Yes it is wonderfully created by almighty
What do I miss in garden?
Not fragrance with flowers even
But my own test for their lovely existence
Can I be not one among them even by chance?
Pinky Raj Jinodiya likes this. Pinky Raj Jinodiya kitna sundar garden he a few seconds ago · Unlike · 1 Like · · Unfollow Post · Share · 22 minutes ago 2 people like this. Anil Shukla lovely poem dear 7 minutes ago via mobile · Unlike · 1 Hasmukh Mehta welcome anil and vinay a few seconds ago · Edited · Unlike · 1 Sukmawati Komala likes this. Sukmawati Komala very beautiful poem dear poet Hasmuk 10 minutes ago · Unlike · 1
dam Schell14 minutes ago :) love it Dhee Khaye13 minutes ago I love the last 2 stanzas Keep doing well God Bless `dheekhaye Comment +1 :) Susan Payton Yates likes this. Susan Payton Yates Thank you, Hasmuka. That was beautiful. You are one among them...you don't have to worry. a few seconds ago · Unlike · 1
Seen by 2 Ryan Abram I don't want to seem like a negative critic, but I think you should look at some of the rhyming schemes. For instance; Though they both end in 'ond', respond and second are pronounced very differently. Respond has that o sound in 'ond', but second has an 'und' sound instead. I've read a lot of your work, and you seem to stick to this very basic rhyming style, and I think maybe you should try something more complex, or without as much control. I think if you payed more attention to the meaning of the poem, rather than whether the rhymes 'fit', you could create something with more flow. It'll sound more natural. Keep writing though! 26 minutes ago · Unlike · 1 Hasmukh Mehta i try to be natural without much efforts in it. it comes naturally when i start writing. the thoughts flow without creating much difference, i stick my natural pattern. one should rather need not change with literature. a few seconds ago · Like Hasmukh Mehta welcome kenny n ryan a few seconds ago · Unlike · 1
I miss in garden I asked her to come near And silently hear
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