If You Want To Please Me Poem by Liza Sud

If You Want To Please Me



If you want to please me - why don't you play
and congratulate me with Trump?
If you want to please me - why don't you say
That Gaddafi is a great guy!

If you want to please me - why don't you turn
to a candlle with trembling light?
If you want to please me -then let me hold
this warm candle in hand like child?

If you want to please me - why don't you write
poems to me in regular style?
If you want to please me - why don't you find
my mistakes - to improve my sight?

If you want to please me - why don't you still
study Russian and talk in Skype?
If you want to please me - so come to me -
I need real friends, not to hide.

If you want to please me - why don't you send
me some money not just email.
Then I'll smile for sure - go buy cottage
and will feel myself neat and well!

If you want to please me - don't talk to me
in each letter about sex.
To please me - you will have to change many things -
so remain yourself and stay blessed!

If You Want To Please Me
Thursday, December 22, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: messages
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
Stubborn poems from a stubborn woman for a stubborn man.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Daniel Brick 22 December 2016

Your poem is very succinct and direct. Let me take just one stanza first: #3 WHY DON'T YOU FIND MY MISTAKES AND IMPROVE MY SIGHT? That's what I did for 34 years with adolescents some of whom were very gifted and I could work cooperatively with them, others were very needy but resentful of me. I grew increasingly uncomfortable with the role of the one who judges others and corrects them. I did not want to exercise such power. I was stressed out for 34 years, and the relief I feel not being that judge and authority figure is so wonderful. // WHY DONT YOU WRITE POEMS TO ME IN A REGULAR STYLE? What does REGULAR STYLE mean? It's taken me about 25 years to write my present poetry and I think it has a PERSONAL style. I am not in full control of how I write poems and I dont want to be in full control. I want to leave openings for surprise, mystery, the unexpected. But I want you to tell me more about your expectations to see how I can accomadate them.

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