In The Darkness Poem by DEEP DARK SOUL POET

In The Darkness

Rating: 3.5


In the darkness
In the darkness I do now but live.
In the darkest hour I shiver.
And I do all but quiver.

In my dark corner I shake to bits.
Just shaking and shaking.
In the dark corner in the darkened room.
I sit alone and cry.

In my darkness Its my life.
Destined to be dark.
Taken over by depression.
And useless thoughts.

Everything went dark long ago.
Its not my time
Its not my life.
It doesn’t belong to me.
It belongs to the darkness of the night

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr 24 September 2016

good theme...not so good structural movement...Needs improvement...Needs to flow better...The current strycture changes in tone & fluxion from a stanzaic perspective...Still enjoyed the trip...Keep that pen pumping ~FjR~

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