John Watt Poem Comment Poem by Krakatoa Kritic 007

If John (or Jane) , a spouse (or bike)can bring butt pain
and some fools in pursuit of mere bliss think both tools.
Most fighters win rounds (one or two) . But do they fight to win (for you) ?
Some might say I'm a blighter. Still, new bikes are lighter!

There are good wines that age, but the best wine IS vintage.
If courtesy's a subtle art, integrity's its dearest part!
Life (flat out)can mean bugs in your eye, though you fly!
Ride uphill grants a clearer view; this world's not you!


Krakatoa Kritic #007

My poem is more a humorous comment on the human tendency toward
revisionism (I hope)than a criticism of John's sly original poem with its twist.

This light-hearted free verse rates a ‘10! ' I enjoyed it, John, though I prefer rhymes!

See ‘Together for the Long Ride, ' a poem by John Watt on PoetrySoup.com.