Lights Comments

Very intuitive. Your diction is so beautiful, you can describe things using words that I would never think of using, yet I can see everything you're describing. It's hard not to question what's really out there, what's after this...

Dear Grace, A strong opening sequence akin to an artist's freshly painted canvas, you've drawn the reader in with such rich hues of words. 'Home is a place where night still (perhaps a double entendre?) means darkness...' in the 2nd stanza, entices one to read onward. Merely a suggestion, but the lines of 'Sparkling off of snow, shining off of windows.' might be enhanced by the omission of the 'of' word. What do you think? It's totally up to you, of course, but it just may tighten the poem up somewhat. Also, later on, if you were to change God by pluralising to gods, might drive the poem's poignancy home that much more. The conclusion is brilliant with your lines 'In the belief of something bigger than us / bigger than this.' Please grace us here at PH with so much more from your glorious heart. Supporting an Upstart Sincerely, Gregory

Very well done, Grace. Excellent imagry!