Matters Of The Heart Poem by Nkosiyazi Kan Kanjiri
Matters Of The Heart
In a distant place
Between the blue mountains,
I see your face as it shines
When the sun rises.
In the eastern horizon,
The earth is set alight.
Creating a love zone,
That settles my heart aglow.
(Nkosiyazi Kan Kanjiri)
Lovely and very romantic. A well articulated and nicely encapsulated piece of poetry, subtly penned from inner recesses of the heart in poetic diction with conviction. An insightful poem depicting beautiful experience of love - a voyage of pure bliss, with good rhyme scheme. Thanks for sharing Nkosiyazi. Please read my poem MANDELA - THE IMMORTAL ICON.
yes, Nkosiyazi, understand, but in this case repetition doesn't work so well (on my opinion) .. A suggestion? mm.. what do you think of: ''That settles my heart aglow'' it describes the same concept and suggest the very same image, but it's not a mere repetition. Keep on posting! Cheers
thank you Fabrizio its really a good suggestion let me edit the poem....it sounds good
dear Nkosiyazi, your first poem at Poem Hunter is a good one, but (on my humble opinion) you should change the 4th (last) line of the second stanza (or the 2nd line, if you prefer - but I'd change the last) , as it is a substantial repetition of the 2nd. WELCOME at Poem Hunter and keep on writing Blessings
thank you Fabrizio....do u have any suggestions on how i canchange it so it sounds better
thank u Fabrizio. Do you have any suggestions on how i can change it so it sounds better? Well i had used that repition purposely since repitition is a poetic device. the light in line 2 and line 4 is acting on two different things that are the heart and earth so i was trying to potray how the beauty of nature is infuencing or affecting the love of the two despite the distance between them. I apriciate your comment since ity makes me grow and improve
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/19/2024 7:27:52 PM # 1.0.0.1119
they really are "matters of the heatt"