Tharmaratnam Vijayakumar


My Fate - Poem by Tharmaratnam Vijayakumar

Weep weep weep the sign of birth
Lost my childhood into our fate causes
Lost my adolescent into the dearth with my family
Imagining my vision become powerless
No one to take part except the mountains rivers green, dark forests
I guided by the forests rivers mountains even the jungle animals I dealt
The sole of my father with me bless guide gives me everything he missed I felt
Whatever I did do my fate
My fate I cannot I guess
You?

Vijayan..

Topic(s) of this poem: sadness

Form: Blank Verse


Comments about My Fate by Tharmaratnam Vijayakumar

  • Rm. Shanmugam Chettiar (11/4/2015 7:51:00 AM)


    Weep, weep, weep, a sign of birth
    the childhood lost to the fate,
    the adolescence lost with family,
    my vision going powerless,
    with no one care but the mountain and forest,
    with no one to guide but the rivers and animals
    and with the soul of my father blessing,
    i have come thus far by fate
    and into what fate i would go, i do not know
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    Tharmaratnam Vijayakumar Tharmaratnam Vijayakumar (11/4/2015 8:08:00 AM)

    It is great work you have done. I thing now my poem got the standard style because of you. Thanks for spending your valuable time to do the correction to my poem. Could you advise me in what areas I wanted to consider when writing poems. I learned American & british poems, Commonwealth countries poem etc... Thank you sir.

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  • Valsa George (11/4/2015 6:58:00 AM)


    Don't feel depressed! To some extent, we can determine our fate. Hard work is needed to succeed in life. It is the same with writing poems also. As the veteran poet David Wood has advised, read a lot of poems and write and rewrite until you are really satisfied! With time, you 'll be able to make remarkable progress! Through mistakes, we all learn. As your first attempt, your effort is laudable! (Report) Reply

    Tharmaratnam Vijayakumar Tharmaratnam Vijayakumar (11/4/2015 7:59:00 AM)

    Thanks for your comments on my poem. I consider the comment left by you as a great pleasure for me as you are well experienced poet. My forthcoming poems, I will try to produce as stranded poem. Could you advise me in what areas I want to improve, Thank you sir. Have a nice day.

  • David Wood (11/4/2015 5:46:00 AM)


    Not a bad first poem about fate. After writing a poem I usually leave it for a day and look at it again with fresh eyes as usually there is something to change. Also read other poets work and their style of writing. Regarding fate I invite you to reat my ppem Should I Die Tomorrow and Hear me my Love for poems about fate and love. (Report) Reply

    Tharmaratnam Vijayakumar Tharmaratnam Vijayakumar (11/4/2015 8:01:00 AM)

    Thanks for your comment on my poem. I consider the comment left by you as a great pleasure for me as you are well experienced poet. My forthcoming poems, I will try to produce as stranded poem. Could you advise me in what areas I want to improve, Thank you sir. Have a nice day.

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, November 4, 2015



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