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A sublime start with a nice poem, Amanda. You may like to read my poem, Love And Lust. Thank you.

Betrayal of love can always be painful! 'Oh how I wish the hurt I could let out.'...... If let out, this hurt will surely heal! A great write! Your first post itself is so promising Amanda! Thank you for your comment on me!

I know the pain of which you speak, but I didn't fully feel it come through in this piece. Reach deep, Amanda, find the thoughts, the way your body felt, the way things around you changed. Describe the personal grief in personal specifics and not broad, general terms and imagery. Most of all, keep writing. Peace

A well articulated piece of poetry depicting the lamentation of a hurting heart, well articulated and nicely penned. Thanks for sharing. Please read my poem MANDELA - THE IMMORTAL ICON.